Revised Risky Buisness

Thesis Statement:
The consequences to rave & clubbing are always negative.

CON:
The consequences to raves & clubbing aren't always negative because you can make friends, learn different types of dancing, and express yourself.


PRO(s):
The negative consequences over weigh the benefits of raving & clubbing because it has many long term effects such as drug and alcohol abuse, jail time, and even death.

Raves and clubs are unisex. Males and females can enter. By this happening, it causes sexually and attractive activity. The consequence to that is a female getting pregnant. It's a big consequence and responsibility if a female gets pregnant because she is now liable for the infant.

Experiences & Goals

Writing has been truly & passionately apart of my life for quite awhile now. I began noticing how better I've got in writing toward the end of my 7th grade year. I noticed that i had a voice & emotion to mostly every piece that i wrote. & then high school came along & having the right concepts & traits has made me become a more successful writer. My pieces in my freshmen year have surprised me, myself. For example, Roots & Recipe. That piece has motivated my to become a better writer & to look forward to the journey i have in becoming a better writer. It really showed my 'style' & personally & how i write.

Generally, my goal is to progress & press forward into become a better writer. & also to just put out the best work pieces possible. To prove that a guy like me can WRITE & express his feelings as much as he wants; to create that voice. & letting my voice be noticed & to be heard.